Josephine Dracy: The Marriage Stone+ YenGirl's Ending+Lynne's Ending

!!CONTAINS SOME SPOLERS!!!!CONTAINS SOME SPOLERS!!!!CONTAINS SOME SPOLERS!!!!CONTAINS SOME SPOLERS!!!!CONTAINS SOME SPOLERS!!

Original Autorh: Josephine Dracy

Story: The Marriage Stone

Pairing: Snarry (Severus Snape and Harry Potter)

From: Harry Potter J.K. Rowling

Words: 381,147+ 446,353 (Lynne's AU ening)/ 135,132 (YenGirl)

Chapters: 77 (Original)+ 64 (Lynne's AU ending)/ 21 (YenGirl) 

Status: Unfinished (Original) Complete (Lynne's AU ending) Complete (YenGirl)

Language: English

Genre: Romance, Adventure

Description: To avoid the machinations of the Ministry, Harry must marry a reluctant Severus Snape. But marriage to Snape is only the beginning of Harry's problems. Voldemort has returned, and before too long Harry's marriage may determine the world's fate.

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At first when I found this story from FanFiction, I thought this story is going to be a big fiasco.   Harry marries Snape against  his will, and thy'll fall in love in three chapters. 

I WAS WRONG. 

This story was like a drug for me.  I've spent so much time just waiting for miss Josephine Dracy to write again, sadly she hasn't... That's why her awesome fans have written dosens of alternative endings for this epic story.   First one I read was Lynne's AU ending from FanFiction

Josephine Dracy's Original The Marriage Stone: 

'"This is ridiculous!" Hermione exclaimed in frustration. "I mean Harry hardly needs another legal guardian! Doesn't seem fair. He's old enough to get married, but he's not old enough to live on his own!"

Several heads shot up at that, sharp gazes staring at Hermione in amazement. "What?" she said in surprise taking a step back at the scrutiny.

"Hermione Granger, you are brilliant!" Dumbledore exclaimed.'

It really seems like it's going to be all Twilight-ish crap, but Miss Dracy saves the whole plot with as simple things as making Harry and Snape hate eachother, Snape is still that ugly yellow teethed nagging potions master and Harry.... he's the same foolish Gryffindor whos ready to do anything to save his friends.  Brilliant. 

So, it turns out Severus Snape is the Bond-mate of Harry Potter, and they get married to protect Harry from Fudge.  Oh boy, it's going to be awesome!   Only moment I really didn't enjoy as much as the rest of the story was  Snape's family.  In actual HP books Snape didn't have siblings. Just father and mother.  In TMS Snape has three brothers and sister, seemed little ridiculous but for the plot they were necassary. 

 

And then. Then Miss Dracy just stops writing.  Some one says her Father/Brother/Uncle had a cancer and he died.  Someone says  she just got fed up with writing.  Noone knows for sure what happened- at least it seems to be so.SPOILER!!SPOILER!!SPOILER!!SPOILER!!SPOILER!!SPOILER!!SPOILER!!SPOILER!!SPOILER!!  In the highlight of the whole story. After the attac of Voldemort,  Harry has drained all his magic to save everyone.   Harry has fallen in coma, and won't wake up, no matter what.  And that's it.    She leaves a hole to fill.  That's the end of her writings. So sad. So Sad. 

+/-

+Pairing

+Writing Style

+Realistic

+Other characters(Lupin, Sirius, Weaslys, even Malfoys)

+Authors notes

-Wheres the rest of this story??

-Snape's family

 

Lynne's AU ending: 

It started so well, but after forcing myself to read 43 chapters of it my interest towards it helplessly died.   Only thing that happened in Hogwarts and betfeen Snape and Harry felt little confusing and REALLY boring.   Hogwarts is full of muggles and  Squibs... and Snape is doing something random with the roses in his manor with neville and suddently the reader is with  Aunt Petunia and her weird wizard 'friends'. I don't know what else to call them.  Then another thing that made me really bored and somewhat annoyed with the story: HArry's and Snape's relationship made progress to fast. Suddenlty they get rid of the Dark Mark and then *poof* Let's give blowjobs eachother. I really didn't like it at all.    So, I stopped reading it after about 50 chapters.   

+/-

+Auspicious start

-Harry and Snape's relationship makes too much progress

-Boring

-Too many muggles and Petunia

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And then YebGirl's Ending

Ah. This is so much better, than Lynne's.  I really mean it.  YenGirl writes like miss Dracy, realistically and  patient.   Everything is smooth expect some silly moments and SPOILER!!SPOILER!!SPOILER!! Lupin's and Sirius' marriage.    

Only thing that I was really disappointed with was how the story ended.   SPOILER!! SPOILER!!SPOILER!!SPOILER!!

"Do you remember what I told you last week, about masturbation?" 

Yes. This is how the story is going to end.  They're talking about masturbation.  I was so DISAPPOINTED.  Feels bad... Really bad. 

But still, this is one of the best endings I have read.   (I have read many- too many alternative endings for TMS)

+/-

+Realistic

+Writingstyle close to miss Dracy

+Patient

--Ending

--Veird marriage of Lupin and Sirius ORION Black.  Really?!

 

It's really hard to write rewiews in English.  I hope I make progress so others can understad, what the hell I'm babbing here. :D

-Dan

Review of 'Being Wendy' by missylaroux

I am sorry for myself for reading this story, and after that reviewing it.  Also, I want to apologize from missylaroux, if I say something, that hurts her(him).

There will be some spoilers.



Pairing: HookxWendy
From: Peter Pan by J.M Barrie
Author: missylaroux
Words: 66,219
Chapters: 30
Status: Complete
Language: English
Genre: Romance, Angst




So, let's start from the begenning. Story starts with really good begenning, Wendy goes to sleep, and everything seems good, until Captain Hook comes and kidnaps her using her as  a tool in his plan.
Oh, the idea is wonderfull, Wendy being locked in Hook's ship, Jolly Roger against her will.
Yey! Well, there ends my compliments.  Why?
Wendy turns into a Mary Sue, she's perfect, learns everything fast, and other men in the ship are dying to touch her.  I don't know about you, but it annoys me. A LOT.

After Ch.12 the story starts to lose it's strong hold from the  main plot, and  focuses mainly on Hook and Wendy's relationship. It  is REALLY bad, when their discussions are like from Twilight (by Stephanie Mayer).   Everything feels just unrealistic.  Then, of course, theres one boy nearly as old as Wendy, boy named Charlie, who is depressingly, madly in love with Wendy.  And, thats it. He's just a random boy who appears in random scenes, when writer doesn't know, what to write next.

Every move author takes, takes reader farther from the story.  She(he) doesn't justify almost anything. SPOILERSPOILERSPOLERSPOILERSPOILERSPOILERSPOLERSPOILERSPOILERSPOILERSPOLERSPOILER
What happened, when  Wendy betrayed Peter? Where's the fight?? Author can't just drop a scene like that away, especially, when it's Peter Pan, we are talking about!  Fights with pirates are PART OF THE STORY, and they are needed to be there.
Changing pov is one of the most annoying things in the story, with Twilight'ish theme.  ARGH!
Well,  all of a sudden Wendy and Hook are talking about something about the  fight with Peter, and author doesn't EVEN hint, what happened in the  battle against him.
So, totally messed up with pov changes suddently Wendy is preg with Hooks child, and fighting against Indians, Mermaids, Pan and Fairies,  drama starts again, and sounds WAY too much Twilight, again. Makes me just think, why author didn't keep that awesome story, that was in the begenning the whole time?!?
Well, they (Hook and Wendy) travel back to the real world for  a half or five chapters, can't tell, and have adventures with Tiger Lily, and boom, Wendy gives birth to a child that is girl, ofc, and then happens something weird.... I couldn't keep up with the messy plot, and sudden pov changes all the time. And boof: HAPPY ENDING, I was SO suprised....

 ''Aaah, sadness! I mean the story HAS to end (it probably should have many chapters ago. I had actually planned it out in my head to have it stop at 20.'''-missylaroux

For God's sake! That would have been a good choise, miss/mister!



+/-

+Really Good start
+Goo idea
 -result wasn't.
+Pairing
-Pov changes
-Messy plot
-''What the hell is happening in here?''
--Twilight'ish
-Last chapters are just stupid.
+/-Wendy's hair gets blonde from brown.




-Dan

Flying Jolly Roger's Mission.

I'm Dan Holgren. My mission here is to Review fanfictions. Link me you'r ff's, and I'll review them.

-DanHolg